There is a place in which everyone goes
It is a place where everything that you’ve ever experienced in your life time goes
From things that made you the most happy
To things that made you feel deep depression
It is a place that holds your deepest darkest secrets
You can push them away
But at one point or another they will come back to haunt you
Personally, i feel quite miserable when i find myself walking down memory lane
It is easy to recall a memory
An unforgettable experience
Or a forgotten tale
Looking back at your life never gets dull
One should never waste a day
From every good deed to any act of greed
October 7, 2016 at 1:45 am
Amany,
I enjoyed reading this piece because I found it very enlightening to the fact that we all have our ghosts and we should never spend time letting them into our mind. My only thought on improvement with this piece is that you could try breaking up sentences over two or more lines. I feel like that would create a nicer flow because you do have some longer lines that don’t seem to match with your other ones. Overall I really liked it.
-Sydney
November 5, 2016 at 1:04 am
I liked how you gave the idea that everyone has went through hard times, but I think you should try to make your pieces a little bit longer.
Keep up the good work.